Fate

[Venus]

I dreamt of an angel so pure and rare,
Thinking it was someone to truely care,
Trusting with everything here till now,
Then being destroyed by a small lie how,
Only time will tell if it can be mended,
Even with lies defended,
Black and twisted full of self hate,
Drowning in what has become my fate,
Do I care do you? I dont know but I bid you adieu

[Frost]

Kept it's rhyme throughout, kind of kept its meter, aaaand...yes, lies aren't good. o_0

It was good and showed emotion, but experimenting with different rhyme schemes is cool to try.

Nice. XD

[Heart.Break.Kid]

Only time will tell if it can be mended,
Even with lies defendedWow..that part was good. I lyke that! Very nice.

[Venus]

Thank you.. I really like comments back on my writings :)